Friday, May 4, 2007

Annotation #6

School Steroid Use Silent, Rampant

This article is about teens using steroids in the state of Texas. They are not only using it for sports but for impressing their girlfriends or impressing classmates. When coaches to find out about steroid use they don't really confront them. They don't even tell their parents about it. Its almost like they don't care. Why would they sit a key player when they need that player. This article has some what of a positive effect of steroid use. But what there really saying is that teenagers are doing a lot of other bad stuff that is worse then steroids.

Annotation #5

Users only see the big picture

This Article talked about Remy a fake name that told a story about a person that took steroids not for sports. He took the steroids for personal acheivements, and for self esteem. He was also going to take them because he was going to enter a body lifting contest. It also went over a lot of side effects of anabolic steroids. Like acne, male baldness, females developing male characteristics, liver disease, and heart disease.

Thursday, May 3, 2007

I. Introduction
A. Attention-getter
1. Barry Bonds, Sammy Sosa, Mark McGuire, all have something in common. Yeah they are all baseball superstars that have broken many records. But in 2005 Bonds, Sosa, and McGuire were all acused of using steroids.
B. Preview main points
1. Many record holders have been acused of usung steroids while breaking that record. _______________________________________________________________________
2. _______________________________________________________________________
3. _______________________________________________________________________(Transition sentence goes here) C. Thesis statement
1. _______________________________________________________________________ (you may also put the thesis before the preview if you find it to be a better flow for your paper)
II. Body
A. Body paragraph #1 (first proof of your thesis statement)
1. Topic sentence
a. _____________________________________________________________________
2. Supporting details (proof of topic sentence; be specific with details and have enough information)
a. ______________________________________________________________________
b. ______________________________________________________________________
c. ______________________________________________________________________
d. ______________________________________________________________________
e. ______________________________________________________________________
f. ______________________________________________________________________
B. Body paragraph #1 (second proof of your thesis statement)
1. Topic sentence
a. _____________________________________________________________________
2. Supporting details (proof of topic sentence; be specific with details and have enough information)
a. ______________________________________________________________________
b. ______________________________________________________________________
c. ______________________________________________________________________
d. ______________________________________________________________________
e. ______________________________________________________________________
f. ______________________________________________________________________

C. Body paragraph #1 (third proof of your thesis statement)
1. Topic sentence
a. _____________________________________________________________________
2. Supporting details (proof of topic sentence; be specific with details and have enough information)
a. ______________________________________________________________________
b. ______________________________________________________________________
c. ______________________________________________________________________
d. ______________________________________________________________________
e. ______________________________________________________________________
f. ______________________________________________________________________
III. Conclusion
A. Re-state thesis
1. ________________________________________(Transition sentence goes here) B. Review main points
1. _______________________________________________________________________
2. _______________________________________________________________________
3. _______________________________________________________________________(Transition sentence goes here) C. Attention-"goer" (sometimes called the "clincher")
1. _______________________________________________________________________





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